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Deviousness `anmari has been spreading her infectious positivity throughout our community for over 6 years. Throughout this time Ana has been at the core of all things devious, passionately developing an eclectic gallery, helping organise devmeets, participating in chat events and also recently completed dedicating her time as a Community Volunteer. We are absolutely delighted to bestow the Deviousness Award for May 2013 to `anmari, congratulations! Read More
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Sta.sh
Did I say your style was excellent ? Well, now I have !
His life was fascinating, indeed!
There's a few minor things that stood out to me. I don't know if you're interested, if not, just act like I never wrote it. I mean no harm with it
Many of the used swear words don't really fit the setting, 'damn you' seems quite close, but perhaps trying some old British swearwords, or coming up with some curses yourself suits this setting better.
Things like 'scoundrel' and 'may those coins burn holes in your hand!' (to pull something silly from the top of my head) work more convincing than 'modern' swearing like an f-bomb.
Also, the red outline of 'stop' and 'meow' seem to jump out a bit too much.
I thought that using today's curse and swear would make it feel more realistic. I've outlined those words deliberately to emphasize them.
Cheers!